Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting Friday Fictioneers.
PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
Her backpack and duffel bag sat at her feet as she slouched in the seat. She had been staring at the pay phone for hours.
She had gone through every emotion – anger, frustration, fear, hurt, rage, and confusion, now back to fear.
She stood and quickly closed the distance between her and the phone.
“I’d like to make a collect call.”
She waited what seemed an eternity to hear the familiar voice answer.
“Mom?” Her frightened voice was a whisper.
“Lindsay, I’ve been worried sick. Are you okay?”
“I’m at the bus station. Will you come get me?”
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I can hear the fear and worry in both the girl and the mom…good story!
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Thank you.
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I really enjoy your writing!
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The feeling of fear and anxiety comes through really well. Looks like the girl took her tantrums too far. Well written. Cheers
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Thank you. Many teens and many mothers have been here before.
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Love the emotions portrayed and the happy ending!
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Thank you.
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Wow! This packs a punch. I could see it launching a whole book.
Great story. Come see mine here.
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Thanks.
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This got me all worked up, great description of the emotions. I’m glad the girl chose to call.
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Thank you. She’s a smart girl.
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Well written! I’m glad Lindsay found the confidence to call her mom.
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Thank you. Sometimes that’s the hardest call to make.
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I assuming a happy ending here. Glad the girl got the courage to call home.
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Yes a happy ending. These two deserve a happy one.
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As a parent, I’m glad she made that call!
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As a former teenage girl I’m glad she did too!
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I’m glad her emotions led her to make the right choice in the end. Nice take.
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Thanks so much.
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I can feel her summoning all of her courage to act. Good story, Susan!
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Thanks. It takes a lot of courage and humility.
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